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Good, but needs a lot of work!
on October 28, 2017
The plot was good, sorry arc okay but slow. The writing was a huge problem. Stilted dialog, awkward switches from one character to the next. I often didn't know who was saying what. Word repetition, the character were always "finally relaxing" after not having been stressed. Character's motivation not always making sense.
But I like it enough to read the next!