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F R U S T R A T I N G 😡❗️
October 22, 2019
Let me start by saying that the story itself is good: 2 CID officers (rule breaker, Scott/line tower, Maggie) are off on an epic adventure in Venezuela to locate army deserter, Kyle Mercer. This is the framework for what could be a great story by the DeMille duo...
The opening scene is a classic torture scenario. Well written, needed info and the 1st two f-bombs arrive. Sadly, the beginning of this book is replete with gratuitous foul language. Simply. Not. Necessary. Also in that category we have a fascination male genitalia that is just not humorous; not even in a sophomoric stretch. Maybe if you’re 2 six packs in but then could you hold up the iPad or the 450 page brick to read?!?!? As the book progresses, the language and penile predilection quell a bit but they never totally relax to a place that’s appropriate for a writer of DeMille’s skill. Sigh🙄
“The Deserter” looks like book 1 in a new series. Scott and Maggie will be good characters to follow along on adventures if some of the mechanics if the writing can be tightened up. They are well developed with enough room for more discovery to come. There’s tension and humor in their relationship while both have serious skills to get the job done.
An editor is needed to “get this job done”. This book would have read much better and quicker if it were 50-75 fewer pages. Some of the descriptive detail was too much and some of Scott’s meanderings were repetitious. There was snarky humor in some of it but after a while, it was just too much work. I wanted to throw a bomb and move on!
There’s lots of good stuff in “The Deserter”, if you can abide the language and nonsense. Fantastic dialogue, beautiful, descriptive scenery and a complex, confounding antagonist make this a decent read, even if a bit of a chore📚